The case of the expensive suit and the handsome man.
“The handsome man wearing an expensive suit sits on a comfortable couch.”
In my opinion, this kind of writing is fine for first and second drafts, it is a scenic placeholder left there with the intention of describing the character and setting in greater detail.
However, if this kind of writing remains through all of the drafts until your manuscript reaches my desk, this sentence structure will leap off the page and poke me in the eye. That is not to say it will injure your reader in parallel fashion, because this is one of my pet peeves, but it will do your reader (and your story) a great injustice.
Because what does a handsome man look like? What makes an expensive suit, other than the price tag? What does an expensive suit feel like, what fabric was used, what pattern, how does it sit on your character’s body? What makes that couch so damn comfortable? Would I find it comfortable or just the handsome man sitting on it?
See what kind of problems can arise when scenic placeholders survive all the way to your (beloved) reader? It leaves them with more questions than answers.
In my view, the purpose of literature is to communicate feelings, situations, and experiences; not raise trivial questions about itself.



